i have read other essays and they are so amazing..
i am the first to go to college and i feel sick right now. do you have to brag about yourself for the college to see that you belong there or does your wrting sell you
The connection between Vires, Artes, Mores exemplifies not only the morals, values and intelligence a well rounded person has, but it also shows the students Florida State University offers and builds. In my life I have many passions that I try hard to maintain and shape with patience and effort. Two aspects that Mores reflects is my religion and Family culture that I have carried from the Incan fields to the streets of the soldiers. Artes reflects a strong passion that I have just recently discovered, the keys of the piano.
Coming from a another country that is so different from America, I have sometimes struggled to keep my culture and religion in line. I come from Peru, a country in South America that is most likely known for its historical location of Machu Picchu and the Incan culture. The values embedded to us in Peru ranges very differently to what I have absorbed here in this nation. I can remember my first Christmas in New jersey, I was 6 years old and saw snow for the very first time. It was 11 pm when my aunt brought the turkey and cocoa and served me. I looked at the meal and began to wonder what it was. In Peru, we would have roast Duck instead of Turkey and Doña Negra instead of powdered chocolate. As I finished my meal, I made my way through the oddly colored lighted hall and went straight to the huge tree my aunt put up earlier that day. The green tree had a shape like a triangle, and a color that matched the the lights surrounding it. My American cousins joined me later on and asked “So what did you ask Santa to bring you?” I was surprised of what I heard. Who is this Santa and if he can bring presents then why wasn’t I ever aware of his existence. As I went home with my parents I reflected my first American Christmas. Later on throughout the years I would celebrate Christmas the only way an American Peruvian would- I helped my mom put up the Christmas tree,pour the powdered cocoa, insert the Peruvian songs into the CD player and tell my brother about Santa as we eagerly ate the roasted duck my mom brought from a Peruvian market.
i am crying right now because i am so stressed. no one is guiding me at all, my parents cant even help me.
I will help you, but you need to tell me what question you are trying to white an essay about. Is this for an application? Also, I do not know what “Vires, Artes, Mores” is, can you explain more? I have to go get my kids from school now – but I’ll help you more when I get back ok?! Relax… take a deep breath!
Hon – no one can help you further if you don’t answer our questions too….
Good luck.
what are vires, artes, and mores? you may need to elaborate, because i certainly don’t know.
try having a conclusion of sorts, rather than just ending at a random spot.
it’s not that bad, definitely not worth being sick over. when is the application deadline and where are you applying?
Okay, I know this essay topic so let me help you out here.
You write really well, and I think you can incorporate this story into a more elaborate essay by talking about how bringing your Peruvian traditions into America has helped you to become a stronger person. Also, stick to one topic, like your Peruvian traditions, instead of randomly adding in the stuff about piano. I say write about a few traditions you have brought to America with less detail, and then write a paragraph talking about how those traditions have helped you to become a better person and student. Colleges love when you’ve overcome a hardship! Good luck!